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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 545
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    I知 slipping,
    Will you catch me when I fall?

    I知 bleeding,
    Do you care enough to make it stop?

    My heart is missing its pieces,
    Can you help me find them and put them back together?

    I知 lost in my own thoughts,
    I need someone to pull me out.

    I知 breaking apart,
    Won稚 you please help me?

    I知 fading away,
    But I know you won稚 miss me.

    My lights burned out BABY,
    The moment you kissed me.




    Submitted on 2009-09-29 15:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i really like this. Ive felt like that before. good one
    | Posted on 2009-11-04 00:00:00 | by StainedxBlades | [ Reply to This ]


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