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    dots Submission Name: When I fall its not because I tripped.dots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWhen I fall its not because I tripped.dots
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    Stop trying to catch me when I fall,
    I donít want you to save me.
    Donít apologize for not trying help me,
    Because you canít fix what you helped break
    You didnít care enough to stop the harm,
    How long should I have to hide them?
    The blood trails on my arms.
    Never cared for me enough,
    To stop what you knew was going on.
    I needed you to talk to,
    But you could never find the time.
    You said you cared deeply for me,
    Do you understand that this is hard to believe?
    When I thought I fell for you,
    I guess to you it was just a trip.
    I was nothing to you,
    But another mark in your bed post.
    I was right in front of your face,
    And I guess your ignorance put me in my place.
    I realize now that breaking up with you,
    Was possibly the best thing I could do.




    Submitted on 2009-09-29 15:27:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this. i can relate in a way. good job. keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      That's an interesting idea. Why would a person try to stop you from falling when they so obviously tripped you? That's really well realized, and it happens every day to disquize the trip in the first place.
    | Posted on 2009-10-01 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]


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