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    dots Submission Name: Ojaladots
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    Author: fabulousAMY
    ASL Info:    21/Female/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 159/159/61
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOjaladots
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    "Ojala"

    God willing...

    But what nature is God who,
    places nameless babies in unwanted wombs,
    allowing them to come and pass with little notice,
    and punishing their perceived innocence with damnation because dirty dishwater crosses have not been drawn on their foreheads and original sin outweighs death before life?

    The poison is pumped into our bodies,
    Pulses in our veins, passes through our hearts,
    and erodes any connection between body and brain,
    beast and beast, earth and heavens,
    until we are nothing but the abominations we fear,
    and we hear the preacher warn against our wickedness from pulpits...

    God willing...

    You will eat in heaven,
    But starve on earth.
    You will find paradise,
    But man's dominion will spoil and rot,
    And you will choke on beautiful fruit,
    And God's nature will be the cyanide pit caught in your throat.




    Submitted on 2009-09-29 15:33:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes! Yes! Yes! This is probably one of the best pieces I have written in my history on this site. So relatable. Where is this god when you need him? Where is his sincerity? Oh, how I loved this piece, I'm pretty sure my heart stutter-stepped. Can you say "add to favorites"? of course you can. Keep it up, drop by and comment some of my stuff sometime.
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    | Posted on 2009-10-01 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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