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    dots Submission Name: Searchdots

    Author: Sorroe
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I am-in my tired and longing soul-partly contented to linger along the terrible depths of my emotional need.
    In a pool of untouched desires and misguided hopes there is a place reserved for my hunger.
    I ache for the touch of one whom desperately needs and craves my existence.
    I am eager to please another soul in such a longing state as I.
    Searches are futile, for my love slowly devours a rut that runs twenty times deeper into my heart.
    Dissatisfied in the ways of my compassion I lock all feeling away, hoping it would dissolve.
    I look for a place in my life to make someone significant happy, but find closed doors never to be reopened.
    I am weary in the search for my soulís mate; exhaustion clouds my reason and I give in to emptiness.

    Submitted on 2009-09-29 20:41:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The lines flow together really well. The only thought I would give is to try to catch the attention of people more. Make an attention getting part of the poem and try not to make it stay the same throughout. Morph it.
    I really like the poem. It describes that search for love really well. Something I've been going through for a long time.
    | Posted on 2009-10-01 00:00:00 | by Peacejoe | [ Reply to This ]

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