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    dots Submission Name: Liberated Memoriesdots
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    Author: Lil J
    ASL Info:    22/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 40/29/38
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    dotsLiberated Memoriesdots
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    Sitting up late at night, freezing to the core
    Im trying in vain to explain myself to you
    Oblivious words, as cold as your heart
    Hurting me so much, even if they are true

    I get so confused, believing you understand
    But what soon follows completely mystifies me
    Weve shared so much, both of our souls revealed
    Confessions whispered in the dark clandestinely

    Silently I have sat by, scrutinizing your pain
    Even if my words are silenced, I cry out for you
    Because if you wont stand on your own
    What good will my hopeless attempts do?

    So know this, and know it to be real and true
    Once you find yourself, what youve been living for
    Remember me, and all that weve been through
    And know Im not going to be there anymore




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      I really relate and empathize with this piece. We all have that someone who we are no longer with, and understand their tribulations. But we feel slighted that they are leaving us when they need us the most, and needed to be reminded of this fact. You have expressed this idea well, and thoroughly. A magnificent write. Keep up the good work. Drop by and comment some of my work sometime.
    Jeff
    | Posted on 2009-10-01 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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