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    dots Submission Name: Pain, How I Love Theedots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I enjoy what I am....


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    dotsPain, How I Love Theedots
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    This master piece is lovely.
    Like a vision of passion,
    strewn across my skin.
    Sounds of ragged breaths and pleasure laced moans set the mood for inspiration.
    A hand in my hair,
    teeth on my neck,
    nails on my back....
    Creating a picturess scene of wild ecstacy.
    Reds, purples, and pinks...
    splashed against a creamy white backround.
    Flesh is the canvas,
    body fluids the paint,
    and a variety of impliments to construct.
    A beautifully corrupt image in the name of sadomasocism.




    Submitted on 2009-09-30 00:33:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. Drop the gloves because you just knocked me out. There is something so beautiful about pain and pleasure intertwined. You execute this message so well, and in such an erotic way. I would not change a thing, and keep it up. Drop by and comment some of my work sometime.
    Jeff
    | Posted on 2009-10-01 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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