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    dots Submission Name: My Love for you.dots
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    Author: gothgirl101
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pelham,AL
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 10/41/17
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    dotsMy Love for you.dots
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    My love for you is the unending rain that flows my city.....

    It's the way you look at me through the open mirror glass...

    It's the way that when he screams at me it hurts cause I know I did something wrong to hurt him....


    It's so intense that I cut myself over and over just thinking about him the way he would whisper softly in my ear with his chin on my shoulder that he loves me and doesn't mean to hurt me....

    As love kills slowly it hurts to look at him with another girl it hurts like shit to see that....

    It just hurts so bad but he doesn't know it....




    Submitted on 2009-09-30 12:09:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Hi there. Having committed myself to answer your zeros I came to the conclusion that you are virtually always implicated in your love affairs that somehow never end in a happy way.
    Although readers do sometimes dote on such affairs, the never-ending stream does get tiresome. I am not trying to be negative in anyway but I suggest you turn your poetry mind to writing just that as it is really within your scope as I see it. You can write some high level poetry I am sure.
    I think that may also have a therapeutic effect on you to help you along your adventurous way.
    I know you can if you may want to. I am just trying to be of assistance. Are you hiding form your own brilliance mayhap?Luv jm
    | Posted on 2009-12-08 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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