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    dots Submission Name: Raindots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    19/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 153/196/213
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 39
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 583



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       Random... I'm not even sure if it makes sense to me. Haha


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    dotsRaindots
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    Smiling in the freezing rain,
    I’ve found someone to take my pain.
    Dreaming big just once again,
    I’m the one who let you in.
    Taking chances to feel alive,
    Twirling dances of mornings’ strive.
    Listen here you broken mess,
    Things have changed- no more no less.
    In darkness whilst you cry at night,
    He’ll be here to take your fright.
    Don’t let the rain to make you cry,
    When all you need is there inside-
    The water masks the tears and hopes,
    You’ll be happy just one more time.




    Submitted on 2009-09-30 20:44:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is such an inspiring piece!
    I believe with time and effort you could really go places with your writing.
    I loved it and I hope to see more like it.
    I do feel like the ryhme scheme was a bit begginner, but I have trouble with that as well.
    It'll just take practice.

    Keep writing. :3
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by Eyamma | [ Reply to This ]
      I find this to be a rather thought-provoking and emotive piece. It reminds me of when you look out your window on a rainy day, and it looks the exact same as a day you remember from the past. I loved how at the end you brought forth some hope, because everyone knows.. it can't rain forever. Good write, keep it up. Drop by and comment some of my work sometime.
    Jeff
    | Posted on 2009-10-01 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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