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    dots Submission Name: both brokendots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    the times have got you down
    everythime i see you
    your wearing a frawn

    i wish i could help
    i said i would always be there
    im here doing nothing
    but you have to know i really do care

    i want to give you it all
    want nothing more then to see you on your feet
    i want you to be happy
    i wish i could be your feet

    at the end of the day
    you never call
    i only get the ring
    when theres something going wrong

    why must it be this way
    why must you insist that everyone else pays
    the solution is clear
    yet you ignore it everyday

    the way he just sits there and lets the time go by
    those crying phone calls and all the lies
    you have no idea how by that hurts inside.
    i sit there silent and listen
    yet im screaming inside

    he is bringing you down
    i feel your soul slowly die
    please please no more
    for i dont want to hear you cry




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