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both broken

Author: joezwells
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both broken

the times have got you down
everythime i see you
your wearing a frawn

i wish i could help
i said i would always be there
im here doing nothing
but you have to know i really do care

i want to give you it all
want nothing more then to see you on your feet
i want you to be happy
i wish i could be your feet

at the end of the day
you never call
i only get the ring
when theres something going wrong

why must it be this way
why must you insist that everyone else pays
the solution is clear
yet you ignore it everyday

the way he just sits there and lets the time go by
those crying phone calls and all the lies
you have no idea how by that hurts inside.
i sit there silent and listen
yet im screaming inside

he is bringing you down
i feel your soul slowly die
please please no more
for i dont want to hear you cry

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