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    dots Submission Name: Dearly Departeddots

    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Story/Gothic
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    dotsDearly Departeddots

    There she is, laying there peacefully in her coffin
    The pink silk lining it just so.

    She laid there her eyes closed.
    Her body laid there in the wooden box.
    Ready to decay when it was set into the ground.

    Everyone stood there some crying.
    Some showing happiness
    and some anger.

    One particular person showed.
    It was someone who loved her

    He stood near the door and watched everyone.
    He didn't cry for her.
    He just waited.


    After the funeral was over, and everyone left.
    The young man stepped in.
    He wore all black. He had his hands stuffed into his pockets of his long trench coat.
    He smiled down upon the girl.

    Soon her spirit formed and looked to the man standing over her.

    "Are you ready to finally follow me?" He asked his eyes glowing a familiar purple aura
    The girl nodded as he held out his hand.

    She took his hand and gracefully lead her out of the coffin. They walked down the Aisle hand in hand when they arrived at the Entrance she took one look at her body.

    "I'm glad...to finally be leaving..." she placed her hands gently on his chest and rested her head on his chest as well. He summoned his Scythe and held it at his side as he wrapped his arm around her waist with his free hand.

    He whispered in her ear...
    "The Darkness welcomes you my dear...you will stay by my side eternally as my wife and as my queen."

    and soon they faded into the shadows smiling.

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