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    dots Submission Name: War Haiku, The Firstdots
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    Author: Destin
    Elite Ratio:    0.7 - 0/2/6
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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       Three days ago I bought a small, leather-bound notebook without having an= use in mind. Then I wrote a Haiku in it. Now, that's all it is for.


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    dotsWar Haiku, The Firstdots
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    30 Sept 2009
    ar-Ramadi, Iraq

    Somewhere else there is
    An ocean with pretty girls
    All in bikinis

    Captain Morgan rum
    Amber beer and Martinis
    Margaritas, yum

    Soft, golden baked crust
    Sweet filling and crisp pecan
    No food tastes better

    Grass skirts on great legs
    Coconut bras on C-cups
    Bring me Paradise




    Submitted on 2009-10-01 14:48:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like them but, I'm afraid to say, the line Amber beer, Martinis has only six syllables instead of seven. Apart from that they are very clever and you can easily alter it.
    | Posted on 2009-10-03 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


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