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    dots Submission Name: Blackened Heartdots
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    Author: MidnightSun89
    ASL Info:    21/M/N.M
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 63/31/27
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 878
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       "Looking at you and I'm on my bended knee, you have no idea what you did to me." -B.D


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    dotsBlackened Heartdots
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    Tread water you walker. Bleed falsely you fake. Turn around and walk slowly now, in the dreams with no wake.
    Dream hellish you angel. Fall though the sky. Your cloud steppin’ on heaven now. with no soul in your eye.
    Street cracked with the winter. Hearts broke in with the cold. Love lasts on beating time, and on words never told.
    One night on a quaking street. I walked past her ghost. I remember not feeling then, what matters most.
    Time turns the internal clock, and ages all the pain. What difference is there in waiting, when the heart beats the same?

    Fall softly you dawning light. Rise ghostly the stars. I let you run far away. To where this love is no longer ours.
    Tell me your story. The one you cant forget. Tell me of the moment, when your heart and his first met.
    Turning your shoulder. The cold crawling grace, of the lights on your broken wing, and the shadows on your face.
    Was it the silence? Was it the eyes? The audience was waiting, for this black curtain to rise.
    Two hearts for a stage, the sky painted blue. Watchers all wondered then, what broken hearts always knew.





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      i like the ease of this prose, the ease with which it tosses such exravagant images with so little effort. is it the punch, the adamant accusation of the peice's voices that leads to such believability, that we take your side, that you are the only one wrong...yes, because your words seem honest, direct, and free flowing. there are no teary pauses, any second guessing, or hesitant back traces. you do not blame yourself, you commit to your stance and stand tall behind it. i admire the stronge diction and from your strong words, i see some strength that youre not going to stay terribly broken over this for too long.


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    | Posted on 2009-10-02 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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