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    dots Submission Name: October Raindots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 75/179/84
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Life right now.


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    dotsOctober Raindots
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    Lightning scars the sky,
    Splits its face wide open.
    Rain washes over the ground, so dry.
    The Earth is cracked and broken.

    The violence of it all is captivating.
    The cycle of "live and let die".
    My mind is silent, devastated,
    As I watch the horizon cry.

    Wishes flood my heart with sorrow,
    For beauty like this is so rare;
    Serenity as this cannot be borrowed,
    And must be handled with such care.

    My dreams wash away with the October storm;
    And in myself, I am transformed.




    Submitted on 2009-10-01 21:27:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So, what does the statement "live and let die" mean in your eyes? I look at your writing, I think of the end of the world, an earthquake, a flood in the middle of the night, and you there, watching it all from a distance as best you can. To live and let die, this denotes mercy, an ignorance stemming from lack of value, or significance. I could be wrong, surely, but your writing depicts devastation, not permission to dream...I wonder about your motivation, what it might be, besides "life right now". I think you have written this well, I am simply curious as to your motivation. Thanks for sharing.

    Tony
    | Posted on 2009-10-02 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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