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    dots Submission Name: Just Before Midnightdots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 17/26/12
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 55
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsJust Before Midnightdots
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    The Sun bids farewell to all the sad town folk,
    Depressed that another day is finally done.
    But one little detail they all keep forgetting,
    Is that the true magic has just begun.

    As the sky starts to darken,
    Just before midnight.
    Stars awake from their daily slumber,
    And start to brilliantly ignite.

    The stars, excited to see us all,
    Shine brightly as they can.
    They start to form numerous pictures,
    Of gods, creatures, and man.

    The blazing comets join the fun,
    And streaked across the sky.
    With their tails of dazzling orange and red,
    Leaving trails as they pass by.

    And now for the main event,
    The queen of the night!
    The glorious, shining, bright, full moon,
    Graciously sharing her sweet subtle light.

    But of course, the wonders have to come to an end
    As the moon makes way for the sun.
    Sighing happily, the town folk finally realized,
    Now, the day is finally done.




    Submitted on 2009-10-02 14:30:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm...This was bloody brilliant...Really really well done, the word 'depressed' at the beginning may have been just a tad too hard but brilliant nonetheless, imagery is brilliant and the basic Poem structure is intact, all in all I think this is a superb poem. Well done.
    | Posted on 2009-11-01 00:00:00 | by WolvenGlade | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this poem, for it has truth within it. The Night is my time!
    | Posted on 2009-10-08 00:00:00 | by Mythica | [ Reply to This ]
      Well done, I really enjoyed reading this. It brings attention for us to not just enjoy the day, the night also brings out a lot too!
    It was brilliantly written too! Good for you, not to over use it, and I'm sure you hear it often, but keep writing, you have a talent. It flows very evenly onto the page. Easy to remember, and keep to heart. Those are my favorite.
    :]
    | Posted on 2009-10-03 00:00:00 | by witheringmisery | [ Reply to This ]
      Another winner from you. Wonderful images. I really like your poems. Well done.
    | Posted on 2009-10-02 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]


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