Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: leaves of paindots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Nagow
    ASL Info:    20/f/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 56/70/29
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 1050
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 237



    Description:
       Let me know what you think.

    This might seem like it's unfinished, but it is supposed to be that way, so you make up your own story.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsleaves of paindots
    -------------------------------------------


    Silent tears falling from her eyes
    leaves falling from dying trees
    she finally faced all of his lies
    more leaves falling of with ease
    now shes all alone as she cries
    what should we do with these leaves?




    Submitted on 2004-07-20 15:20:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      it leaves on the edge of our seats. What has happened sort of way. Its very short, but very good. Well done. that is a good one
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by freak_like_me | [ Reply to This ]
      I would throw out these leaves or perhaps burn them...

    The poem in general was good. What does this poem have to do with being a teen? (I dont find any similarity...) For me it was slightly too short, and it did look unfinished (but as you say it is ment to look that way). Thats all from me!

    Grade: B
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by WriterX | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    17906

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry