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    dots Submission Name: No regretsdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNo regretsdots
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    I wish I knew I had forgiven

    Thrown him over the banister,
    Like a wet towel to steam
    Under the sun
    And left.

    I wish I was the one to look
    Up the swaying bridges
    And stick tongues out
    At people,

    A moonriver goddess,
    Preaching and fulfilled.

    I wish the metal tinge beneath my feet
    Would turn in something other
    Than these icy slippers,

    Tempered rosemary,

    And help me palm my way
    Up to the sky,
    Unclenched.




    Submitted on 2009-10-03 06:51:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful poetry, lovely images and descriptions. I have to say i found the message a bit blurred or obscured. I know this piece is about no regrets and it is wonderfully worded but i just fail to see the piece as a whole, i may be too tired to understand it at present so disregard this comment if that is the case haha. A good write.

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    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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