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    dots Submission Name: Holding Handsdots
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    Author: akaietowa-ru_18
    ASL Info:    20/F/Belly of the Beast
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 101/125/64
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 466
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1269



    Description:
       A lil' poem for my friendship with three special girls. It wasn't as over dramatized or "fated" as some people like to imagine. It was something simple and ordinary that over time, turned into a bond deeper than anything I could have imagined.

    Enjoy~


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    dotsHolding Handsdots
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    Never were we "forever together",
    We met when we were barely
    Wearing training bras and first blooming
    Into the imbeciles we are today.

    It was never a meeting of Fate,
    We weren't in diapers,
    It wasn't the first day of kindergarten,
    It wasn't even all that dramatic.

    Simply put, we weren't all that close.
    No heart-pounding or life-changing event,
    It was a normal Winter day,
    I was new, naive and nervous.

    Not even, were you the first to talk to me,
    Probably the fiftieth? Sixty? Twenty?
    Ours was a slow thing,
    The pace of a snail really.

    Without realizing a thing
    Your hand found mine
    You hold it, warm and kind
    Soft and gentle.

    A love like ours, simple yet deep
    Wouldn't make it to the big screen,
    Just make sure,
    You never let go.

    A simple and uneventful as it was
    I'm glad for it, because
    After years of never having
    I have a generous and loving hand.

    Make sure, you never let go
    Even if it was simple
    I wouldn't imagine
    Ever living without you now.




    Submitted on 2009-10-03 16:41:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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