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    dots Submission Name: Victorydots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsVictorydots
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    Smack the television around,
    that bitch does nothing but lie,
    breeding deceit,
    endless bars trying to keep the truth confined.
    Smell the bullshit in the air,
    blooming on the trees lavender and pink.
    The scent of doom,
    strangling every chance to climb free,
    but we need to push forward,
    reach high ground by noon.
    Don't give in.

    Interchanging false flags,
    ascending our misery to the heavens,
    little do they know that this day we are the ones who dine victorious!

    Do the drugs really dull us down to the point of standing idly by?
    Or do they save us from the madness forcing itself upon us?
    They will never understand,
    this empire is built of sand.

    Interchanging minds take control,
    thoughts smearing their filthy little hands across our faces,
    pushing,
    smothering,
    forcing us down into submission.
    Victory will be ours.







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      From this I get the impression fo you explaing the way society being mislead by interchanging minds who are so much more clever than we are on a global scale.The beginning opens up that impression.

    Smack the television around,
    that [censored] does nothing but lie,
    breeding deceit,
    endless bars trying to keep the truth confined
    Smell the bull[censored] in the air,
    blooming on the trees lavender and pink.

    I'm getting from that the awareness that one must have for the most irrelevant media that decieves more than informing true facts of our homeland.The title I have a question for.
    With all the interchanging minds that want full control.Who is it that has the victory, them or the people of the world?
    I'm guessing you saying victorious because so many Americans have caught onto national deception and the miles of webs containing lies dating back years are now being discovered.The victory is we as people knowing what's really going on and don't think for a second were not being lied to.I like this.It's very deep and reminds me that my mind must always be intact to the things I watch.When you say: "Do the drugs really dull us down to the point of standing idle by"

    I don't think it has much to do with narcotics as it may sound.Sounds like your talking about distraction here and the average person of society being idle minded to not see the reality around them of today's world.Victory can be ours...But it will have no place in history if we do not prevent the things that are to come.

    RG.
    | Posted on 2010-08-27 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Definitely an improvement in your writing here, one of your better pieces i would say, interesting start, smacking the tv around coz shes a liar, yes i loved this. Interesting piece although i have to say i dont really get the message, maybe i am too tired to read this but i feel you could have packaged this a bit better or portrayed id a little more direct but then again this is just me. Good write.

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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