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    dots Submission Name: Battle Crydots
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    Author: Snarkypoet
    ASL Info:    20/F/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 6/7/12
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 703
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 677



    Description:
       Hello! It is I, finally truly trying to live up to my title of poet.
    -.-'

    To be honest, this is really just my first attempt at Italian style sonnets. The meaning sort of flowed out on it's own. In the true Italian style, the poem should switch voice/opinion at the start of the ninth line, I'm not sure if I did that well enough...

    Anyway, critics make me smile! Comment, pretty please?


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    dotsBattle Crydots
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    There is no pleasant dream worth dying for,
    though it may be the thought of some brave fools.
    There's no reason to live by all the rules
    that have the honor of a drunken whore.
    Life shall never be what it was before.
    For the white heat of youth, it quickly cools
    and leaves only a few hard earned jewels.
    And yet the foolish children will still fight,
    and with each win, they will grow a little
    for no blood should ever be shed in vain.
    Each brave young soul, convinced his laws are right,
    to fight for his code and his comrades slain.
    Such passionate fools I can't belittle.




    Submitted on 2009-10-03 23:19:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You are poet. I noticed the shift. The change of direction from where it might have gone as a tirade against war was refreshing. I particularly liked the opening lines.
    | Posted on 2009-10-05 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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