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    dots Submission Name: The Mirror of Truthdots
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    Author: Egan
    ASL Info:    23/Male/My girl's bed
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 5/9/4
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Dark
    Total Views: 85
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 90



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    dotsThe Mirror of Truthdots
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    My own reflection
    Stares back with accusing eyes
    Knowing all my sins




    Submitted on 2009-10-03 23:35:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't like haiku often, it has to be dazzling for me to praise it. This one is really praise-worthy... Excellent job pressing thoughts into the 5/7/5 and actually achieving something with it, which most don't. This one speaks volumes.
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      Perfect haiku, i enjoyed it , it was agreat description of a hidden truth we all seem to overlook. The mirror does indeed reveal the truth and things we keep hidden from the outside world, so few of us actually really look at these things because we are afraid to acknoweledge our dark sides. A good write and a great read. Thank you for sharing.

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      Perfect haiku 5 7 5 and comes full circle. I've always been amazed by haiku, the power of so little words. I've only written one because of the restrictions. Truly awe inspiring. Thanks for the read couldn't be tighter as far as I'm concerned, so there is no critiquing to be done here. Just appreciation for your talent!!!

    Thanks for the read and Welcome to Elite
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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