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    dots Submission Name: Please, dont godots
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    Author: GoddessLove1990
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPlease, dont godots
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    She looks him calmly in the eyes;
    The father of her child.
    Thier talk is polite and mild.
    They both put up a front, never letting the pain show.
    He turns to other girls,
    As she hides within herself.
    He doesnt know he's still the center of her world.
    He stole her heart and she shattered his.
    Caught up in her ego, never knowing how much she'd miss.
    She wants him back but he's too afriad to try.
    He never thought she'd make him want to die.
    She knows she doesnt deserve him,
    but she cant help wanting him more each day.
    Maybe if she treats him right this time,
    all the old pain will go away.
    He knows he pushed her away but he still hates her for it. He wants to be with her but she cant be trusted.
    His hand is on the door as she softly calls his name.
    She opens her mouth and then looks away.
    She wants to say she's sorry
    But she'll always be the center of his pain.
    "Nevermind," she says with a soft smile.
    She hugs their son tightly,
    And tries to make his day worthwhile.




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