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    dots Submission Name: My Lifedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
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    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    dotsMy Lifedots
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    Dear Lord,

    I come to you now,
    tonight,
    at this moment in my life

    For I am in a deep state of depression.

    I long to know why?!?

    Why am I hurting?
    Why was I part of your plan?
    And certainly, why am I to be the one to put up with all this abuse?

    I am not meant to take my own life,
    For you did not allow that 12 gauge to do so,
    nor those several drug over doses.
    So why am I still here?

    Why put me through hell and then NOT allow me to end it when I please?!

    Dear Lord,

    I am desperate for I cannot bear much more!
    I am broken,
    these events have taken their toll...

    I am reaching out to you,
    PLEASE.... grab a hold me of




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