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    dots Submission Name: Good Bad and Uglydots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
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    dotsGood Bad and Uglydots
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    I miss you for you are my other half!
    Yet you are at times my bad half!
    I have gotten far without you near!
    yet I have fallen deeper into this depression I try my best to hide from!

    You are and forever will be my good bad and ugly!

    I love you for you were the one holding me as they put my abusive step father away for 8 years
    I thank you for you saved my life from all my over doses
    then of course that Christmas morning I tried to end my life!
    You will always remain my first true love,
    however where do we go from here?

    For I have come to terms with you being ....

    My Good, Bad and Ugly




    Submitted on 2009-10-04 00:35:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mag-damn-nificent! This was such an emotive piece, and so relatable. You didn't slap anyone with an extremely complex prose and you didn't need to; LOVED IT! Keep it up, come by and comment my work sometime.
    Jeff
    | Posted on 2009-10-05 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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