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    dots Submission Name: "We"dots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 528
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1992



    Description:
       An inspiration from Flynn's "August in ice (the world is small)"


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    dots"We"dots
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    Rambling thoughts
    Gestured smiles
    Thoughtless words
    And tender lies

    Here we stand in a world immoral
    A world lost, a world forgotten

    "Things are different than they were five years ago"
    I can't agree more

    We're shunning kindness
    Harming innocence
    Berating creativity

    Where did the ingenuity go?
    Where did the ability to think outside the box
    disappear to?

    We're now wrapped in a cosmic blanket of murder
    Frugality
    Greed

    I need the needle that wove this tapestry
    I need it to undo the thread wrought upon
    humankind
    Slowly unravel this misguided, black throw

    There is no longer color
    No longer happiness in yellows
    Love in pinks
    Passion reds

    Instead we're left with gray politics
    Black hatred
    Brown discrepancy

    This earth is a harbinger of all things unnecessary
    "Us"
    A word to describe one whole
    Which is greater than the sum of it's parts

    But do we see this?
    Do we realize how true and desirable this is?
    Of course not
    We're wrapped in a blanket of murder
    Of lies
    Destruction

    We're nothing but a broken vow
    Put upon humanity to ensure it's everlasting life
    And this we've consumed, yet still hungry for more
    More of something we cannot have
    We cave, we crack, we dwindle

    Even this, just this, "we"
    I am a bystander
    I am an onlooker
    To this destroyed enigma
    Humankind

    I am not a part of "we"
    nor will I ever be
    "We" is the word for ignorance
    the word for damnable existence

    "We" is the word of worlds collapsed.




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      Yes i cannot agree more, everything has changed and the outlook is grimm, we seem to chase after falsities and find happiness in hollow things we call our lives. These days the only sensations and beauties we see are those of death and destruction. The media inflates everything to over bloated garbage and then paints it gold for us to love. Powerful views expressed here.

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-10-04 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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