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    dots Submission Name: A Force of Naturedots
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    Author: Bleeding_AngelX
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    dotsA Force of Naturedots
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    “You know how when you’re watching movies and there’s some drug the government is giving to it’s people and you sit there in your comfortable chair and you cheer for the guy who’s not taking that drug? You sit there and say, ‘I would be just like him. A rebel. I can’t people how fake this is. People wouldn’t just blindly take that drug.’ How ‘bout you wake the fuck. You’re a sheep just like the rest of ‘em. It happened just like in the movies.”

    “Yeah, everyone was apprehensive at first. ‘I don’t know about this.’ ‘Sounds a little dangerous.’ Those sorts of comments go right out the window when you see a man lift a car over his head. Right after that it was all about the Stimms. Fucking Boosters. Yeah, they say that more than two Stimms can degrade your genetic code to dangerous points and can cause dementia. Does anyone else see a problem with that? It’s rewriting your fucking genetic code! What’s wrong with you people? When did humanity stop being good enough? That’s what I set out to know.”

    “And that’s what brings all of you here in front of me today. You’ve all took a look around, smelled the bullshit that some corporate big-wigs were trying to force feed down your throat and said no thanks. Congratulations, you’re not as stupid as everyone else here. I only hope that lasts.”

    “Now listen up and listen up good. I ain’t gunna feed you that same shit. I’m going to tell you the facts. Those Stimms mess with your genetic code. It changes who you are. No wonder that stuffs lethal at high dosages. The human genome wasn’t meant to take that kind of abuse. And those Boosts? You’ve got to be kidding me. I’ve seen someone using that stuff. If any of you remember when heroine was a big craze, it looks just the same. They’re all huddled up in a corner and shoving needles into their skin. I’ve watched them. I know what happens. That stuffs more addictive than any of the mainstream drugs. Thats all this is. It’s legal drugs. CoreTech is building himself an army of super predators. They’re just like the dinosaurs; they’re powerful and to stupid to see what’s coming for them. And you wanna know just what it is that is coming? The mother fucking Comet!”

    Not everyone was pleased to hear about Stimms. Most eventually converted, but those that didn’t went into hiding. At first, there were just small pockets of resistance. Subverts, the government called them. It started out small, but they grew in numbers and eventually became the force known as Comet. A terrorist group in the eyes of the world above and heros to those that hide from CoreTech. CoreTech changed the world, and Comet wanted it back.




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      i reali liked this bc it is soo true how people are like sheEp and u have a great way with words.
    | Posted on 2009-10-06 00:00:00 | by MiseryMarie | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool story, i enjoyed it. Kind of like a prelude to a new action game promising lots of blood and gore and violence. Very intense, left me not wanting to accept it was over as i just started getting into it hehe. So when is the next installment? :-) thanks for setting my imagination alight, a pleasure indeed it is to read these words you conjure up.

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    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-10-05 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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