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    dots Submission Name: Perfect Worlddots
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    Author: clarywhite wolf
    ASL Info:    15, Female, Nc
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 7/1/4
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
    Total Views: 27
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 730



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       Not really anything to praise and worship. Just somthing that I thought of when I was being bored. and when recent issues concerning death decided for me to change my ways.


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    dotsPerfect Worlddots
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    A shimmering lake, tasting of Sunny D light, but looking as clear as air itself. No people only spirits floating about blissfully. No worries, only freedom swelling through them. Everyone would get along, by their interior traits, instead of the too judged exterior outlooks. There would never be day, only night. And the moon would always be full, illuminating the perfect amount of glow. Soft grass would be growing, without the worry of insects. Food wouldn’t matter, nor water, being that we were risen from the dead once again. I would run through the fields and roll around in the grass, only to realize. This is not my perfect world. Because, in my perfect world there is no death...








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      You ask for deep thought responses... I guess mine is, after awhile it will certainly get crowded if no one ever leaves the scene... if none are added, then it will surely get stagnant. I imagine Heaven stays interesting because new people arrive every day. Imagine being there 10,000 years in the same bad cocktail party setting, without the cocktails... without any new people or stories or ideas....

    Even the GOP serves booze... how else would they keep membership???
    | Posted on 2009-10-05 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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