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    dots Submission Name: OLD TIMES ARE NEW TIMESdots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Old times are new times
    what once was new time, are old time
    like a hour glass turning up side down
    testing my insanity and my inner strength

    Late nights
    restless sleep
    how I wish I could think

    theses emotions are to be compared to hurricane katrina
    no where to hide
    anger is the wind
    as the depression is water flooding my eyes
    lighting stike the paper ,as i let my mind free
    but its not safe
    some one save me and take away all the pain

    torn between two soul as it seem
    dancing in the ashes of my old life
    opening arms to a new light

    a old smile
    a old touch
    once said to be a angel kiss
    has me still standing on my two own feet

    but before i stand,
    on my kness
    praying if i dont awake
    i pomise to you my heart to keep

    i let these words
    leave my mouth
    without hesitation
    and no regrets

    How much more could i take
    even the strong fall
    there only so much
    a man can do

    my thoughts are as deep and secretive
    as 9/11
    as my eyes are open telling nothing but truth of these twisted feeling
    but as i speak the words come out a lie

    Submitted on 2009-10-05 17:16:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am simply mesmerized by this piece. I loved your tie-ins to current events, and how they correlated to the experiences you presented. A strong piece. Keep up the good work; come by and comment my work sometime.
    | Posted on 2009-10-05 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]

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