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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: belle1
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       haven't written since I was a child.F
    found this quite cathartic

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    They told me lies
    Happy-ever-after tales were
    lies lies lies

    Cracks started to show in the choices I made
    My choices, my consequences
    Nevermind, just
    live the lie

    But it takes takes over my life and
    Starts taking it's toll

    Admitting truth
    Brings temporary relief, then
    I spin my own
    Web of lies

    Still clinging to happy ever atfer
    For as long as I can, because
    Of my fear to do otherwise, then

    Final realisation brings numbing relief
    No expectation is an end to deception
    Pointlesness my final belief

    Submitted on 2009-10-05 17:41:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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