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    dots Submission Name: Swallow Me Wholedots
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    Author: MiseryMarie
    Elite Ratio:    2.92 - 8/12/15
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 674
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 633



    Description:
       A Random writing from deep in the back of my mind
    No really, I'm just sort of lost and running from feeling anything. Feeling's hurt the good and the bad. 'Cause no matter how beautiful a moments is it always dissappears . . .


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    dotsSwallow Me Wholedots
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    I walk this never ending path that circles around the world,
    I'm running so fast yet it seems I'm walking so slowly.
    Without a thought I go from pole to pole,
    It's all a black abyis so dark and ready to swallow me whole.
    I pass the world without a thought the universe devowers evreything in it's path.

    I float down the sea apon a wraft.
    back to the start again,
    In my chest so sharp I feel this pain.
    I shout to the world but no one hears,
    all of thes voices and all of my fears.
    So now I say goodbye with a knife driven to my heart.




    Submitted on 2009-10-06 18:38:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Rawr girl, RAWR!!!!! I'm so glad you can put your poetry up on here, and everytime you do I get a PM ^.^ So you can expect my comments from now on!
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    Nice piece, I've heard it from your own mouth and must say your emotions are not lacking in words without your voice to let them flow through. Other than grammar mistakes that I already corrected for you, it is and was and will always be wonderFUL!!!
    | Posted on 2009-10-06 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]


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