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    dots Submission Name: A place without Fear . . dots
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    Author: Scaredheart
    ASL Info:    15/ Female/ NC
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 92/62/50
    Words: 368
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 48
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       >_> I . . . just was writing . . .I'm not sure where this came from truly . . . Judge as you may


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    dotsA place without Fear . . dots
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    Trust, Hate, all these thing's we think.
    Love, Faith, all these thing's we keep faint.
    Regrets, Lies, all these thing's we keep distant to our minds.
    Past, Future, all these thing's we want to get.

    So why do we sit here and meditate om thing's so simply and clear.
    So why do we let all these thing's disappear?

    Love in Trust brings our Faith.
    Hate in Regrets only foretells lies.
    Our Past should define our Future.

    Or can we change the ever glowing light of day to something a little more different?
    Can we take out mind and pry away from those predetermined thoughts of sin?

    Maybe it's all about what we say and how we say it.
    Or maybe it's all about what we see and how we see it.

    So how do you view the world?
    What vision do you behold in the light?

    Is your looking glass tinted with Hate of self or others?
    Is your eye covered with wool of Trust or a lover?

    What path are you walking from day to day?
    Is it as simple as you tend to say.
    Can you break from that rope you hold,
    can you fall into the Truth unknown?

    Can we envelope our self with Faith instead of Fear,
    or will our Faith cause us to Fear?
    Can we Trust those we do not Love,
    to behold our Past with out judgement.

    Are we longing to see,
    what was never meant to be.
    Are we dying to see,
    what could never be?
    Walk a new path with me,
    a path untainted by our Fears.
    A Path unwalked by the deers.

    Follow me,
    closely here.
    To a place unmarked by men,
    and unshadowed by Human fears!

    Try to see,
    everything with a new light of day.
    With the sun from the west and setting in the East.
    Don't try to make thing's right to you or me,
    just let thing's be so differently.

    Do not fear,
    what you do not know.
    Embrace that that is unknown,
    open arms and inviting hearts.
    Trust me dear,
    this is only the start . . .




    Submitted on 2009-10-07 19:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Lets see, I enjoy the aspect of the poem,
    It seems you are asking more questions then you are making statements, which is good for making the reader think. Yet your more to the point which may cause the readers mind to most likely wander. Other than that it is a rather well written poem.

    Erebus
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    | Posted on 2009-10-07 00:00:00 | by Erebus | [ Reply to This ]
      It's good to be able to embrace things, people...
    sometimes it's even a good thing. I do like this piece much better than the heart one, but I'm a little confused by the 's on the word "thing"... otherwise, it's hopeful, optimistic... Keep that attitude, kiddo, you'll need it.
    | Posted on 2009-10-07 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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