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    dots Submission Name: A Loss Of Perceptiondots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 603/832/351
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 26
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    dotsA Loss Of Perceptiondots
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    Head throbbing,
    Eyes drifting,
    Room spinning,
    Body fatigues,
    Thoughts shifting,
    Emotions become numb.

    A place so golden, where you enter,
    First time you visit, you never leave.
    Even as this place is not for your best interest,
    You still stay.

    A perfect paradise,
    No need for love,
    No need for a place to worry about,
    No bils, no automobiles,
    Just a state of mind,
    So far safe from the real world.

    Sobreity has nothing compared to these feelings,
    Vanquishing my stress with my memories,
    Damage the part of the brain I need not,
    Funny,
    D' doesn't stand for death,
    It stands for...


    Desire.




    Submitted on 2009-10-08 00:02:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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