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    dots Submission Name: Slate Day Musingsdots

    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       "Looking out the window of a hotel, idly watching light rain speckle upon roof top puddles which reflect the gray skies above."

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    dotsSlate Day Musingsdots

    Gray pools on the roof tops
    Shine a mirrored sky
    And rain keeps falling
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    Submitted on 2009-10-08 12:46:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this piece. It left me wishing it was longer as any good work does.

    Keep on writing.
    | Posted on 2009-10-10 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your being there with nature view of things. Haven't seen your work for some time. Glad you're back.
    | Posted on 2009-10-08 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like the simplicity of this write...but there is a spelling error and it throws the whole thing off.

    'mirrired' is 'mirrored'

    but other then that it is the Prefect fall poem...dark and grey rainy nights with the puddles reflecting light


    Thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2009-10-08 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]

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