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    dots Submission Name: Creep Showdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 580
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       and really i just miss my boyfriend so if you could stop torturing me at the same time i hate myself already, dont make me fuckin kill myself cuz i want to so much. that shit hurts


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    dotsCreep Showdots
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    once again i escape
    into the prison of my mind
    im alone inside here
    and the bricks are stacked so high
    four brick walls like towers
    with a roof and no windows to see
    with no way in but no escape
    i feel safe but never free
    and when i scream its from the nightmares
    but im not really that scared
    cuz from a lack of inspiration
    the dreams are old and i dont care
    no one here will know me
    as long as im away
    no one here will touch me
    cuz i wont let them stay
    but when i want to leave
    i dont know where to go
    so i follow passing currents
    until i find the show
    when we get there i am noticed
    and they all want to see
    but this is not a freak show
    its the creep show locked in me




    Submitted on 2009-10-08 14:31:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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