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    dots Submission Name: My Demonsdots

    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       All these years I struggled
    to believe in what you said.
    Fighting always the demons
    that warred inside my head.

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    dotsMy Demonsdots

    When you said you loved me
    I thought could this be true?
    Over and over again you proved it
    Until I thought I knew.

    So many times I questioned
    could he love someone like me?
    Yet every time I needed
    When I looked right there you'd be.

    All these years I struggled
    to believe in what you said.
    Fighting always the demons
    that warred inside my head.

    Then finally at last I believed it
    Believed that love declared.
    Believed you truly love me
    the demons were no longer barred.

    My world it seemed then crumbled
    In a flash what I knew was gone.
    I was waking all alone
    my heart screaming I'd been so wrong.

    All the promises I believed in
    the ones I'd fought against through time.
    Were disappearing so very quickly
    and I was losing what was mine.

    I know in my heart he still loves me
    that his words still had to be true.
    But those demons now are louder
    and hope is now quieter too.

    Leaving my soul splintered
    questioning all I have known.
    Trying to hold on and have faith
    when inside my demons have grown.

    Can I again believe him?
    Believe what he says is true.
    That he really wants to come home
    and home is with me and not you.

    Inside my head my demons
    are screaming louder still.
    Telling me they are only words
    screaming at me they can't be real.

    How do I go back now
    to that place that once was warm?
    To the place I believed he loved me
    and my demons screamed no more?

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