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    dots Submission Name: Study to Deathdots

    Author: Scaredheart
    ASL Info:    15/ Female/ NC
    Elite Ratio:    6.71 - 108/65/55
    Words: 280
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       A poem for the kids that push too hard, you need to slow down and enjoy life. If you make less then a perfect grade it won't kill you. But running all day every day will. I wrote this mainly for a friend that I'm worried might be doing this type of thing. No sleep and all study. I'm currently sorta a victim of that myself. . . .

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    dotsStudy to Deathdots

    No sleep,
    no bed.
    Just floor,
    and under your bed.
    All of this,
    so you can show off another 'A' to them all.

    You forgot your food last night,
    you ignore the noises your stomach makes for the words that filter through your head.
    You haven't slept,
    in over a week.
    Why they ask why,
    your already half way asleep.

    Take a breath,
    try to concentrate.
    Forget the world,
    and learn even more.
    How many days have you hidden those circles under your eyes,
    from every suspicious sight.

    Read some more,
    turn your music up.
    Drown the world,
    in your facts of fluorescent lights.
    Shut them up,
    with all that talk.
    Make them stop,
    by not showing up.

    You have to work,
    you have to be the best.
    You have to win,
    no second best.
    You scoff at their silly games,
    you know better than to play that way.

    No time for fun when your busy studying your life away,
    no time to play with that fag anyways.
    Come on,
    who really needs eight hours of sleep,
    drink a monster and keep awake.

    Insomnia is not your game,
    but you have ways to stay awake.
    you know it all.
    you have it all.
    Inside that head,
    that never rests.

    Pound away,
    keep running.
    Don't let your eye's drop,
    from that prize of learning.
    Just keep going,
    forget the pain.
    Just keep studying,
    no matter how much it hurts your brain.

    They'll never mock you again,
    your so great at this game.
    Just keep studying,
    you'll get your 'A'.
    Just keep running,
    till your heart gives way. . .

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      First impressions?

    1.) I absolutely adore the last stanza. It's defiantly memorable.

    2.) This poem reminds me of Al. A lot.

    3.) I think you should practice writing essays. Essays don't always have to be about boring things. They can be inspirational, motivational, and fun-i-national. xD I think you'd be good at it.

    I can't really relate myself, as I've never been one of those to push hard in school. I'm a procrastinator, a daydreamer, and a free thinker. Motivation? It applies little in my life. Few things motivate me. Heh.

    I think the basic message is good, overlapped with some sarcasm that really sends the point home. It's a free style that works for you. There are a few kinks that might concern me if you ever intended to have this published, but I wouldn't worry about it. It's like a moral lesson. *nods* I like that.

    <3 Sweets
    | Posted on 2009-10-08 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, I can really understand what thsi is about, because for one we are Boyfriend and Girlfriend, and 2 we go to the same school. and we both i believe have a very bad opinion on it. But nevertheless the poem is amazing, i like it it is very down to earth and thats how it should be, i love and i love you.
    | Posted on 2009-10-08 00:00:00 | by Monsun | [ Reply to This ]

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