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    dots Submission Name: You're a Blind Mandots
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    Author: Vermalin
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 15/29/21
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Prose/Venting
    Total Views: 750
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsYou're a Blind Mandots
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    Your beauty intoxicates all you encounter.
    Yet you fail to notice;
    This is your blunder.

    You've had a rough time,
    Though now it is over.
    But yet you continue clinging to what is left over.

    And in doing this your depression grows deeper,
    Pulling you apart at the seams.
    Causing you to unravel and fall to your knees,
    Pondering desperately: "How much worse can it be? "

    To ease your mind of your terrible burden,
    You bargain with your inner demon.
    Giving you a release, in turn for your soul:
    That you believe tarnished and not worth much at all.

    When all of your loved ones have been with you till now.
    But here comes the crossroads up ahead,
    They give you a choice: "Stand tall or fall down."

    You have your beauty and charm,
    Your intelligence and grace,
    Your monstrosity and health.
    Your ego and adoration from others.

    What more does it take for you?




    Submitted on 2009-10-09 12:10:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this write so much.
    It remindes me of someone. O.e"

    You're writing style is so badass, I've always loved it. I feel like the flow of it is a little wrong though.

    I don't know, it feels more like it could be a prose, or something. Not sure. I'd have to read over it a few times.

    Either way, I love it.
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by Eyamma | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that if you've been unhappy for a while it can feel easier to stay unhappy... not only is there less chance of disappointment, but there's also the familiarity of it. We really are creatures of habit. Happiness can feel scary.

    I have a very good friend, and on the surface of things she has a good life. A supportive family, she's very intelligent and pretty, she's funny, great with kids and good-natured. She also gets so terrifyingly suicidal that sometimes I think about helping her to die, because her pain is enormous. She's thrown herself off a bridge before in a suicide attempt.

    It's easy to look at someone's life and see it as good, to see them as lucky, but sometimes the challenge is living. It isn't always why live, sometimes it's how live.

    Do you get what I mean?

    A provocatiive write, to say the least...

    Aly
    | Posted on 2009-10-10 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]


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