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Author: stormkrow
ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51 /52 /39
Words: 166
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Ashes to ashes-n-dust to dust these
Are the things that break us
Apart from our powerful lust.

Now this is the time and day
That we all must trust
And ought not break our
Bond of trust

Curiosity killed the cat
Satisfaction brought it back
Now I must come back to the

Lack of slack that
Hacked my back too crack
When I stepped on a crack
Which will extract the lack of slack

Show me the magic Kurt Cobain
So that I can feel your pain
Standing in the rain
Thus your pain my gain

Thru cane too slain
My great done jus
Before the passing train

Some ware down
The lane you shall
Endure my dreadful pain

High atop a crumbling crane
So come on Kurt Cobain
Show me your pain .

Submitted on 2009-10-09 22:20:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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