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    dots Submission Name: Life dots

    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLife dots

    Ashes to ashes-n-dust to dust these
    Are the things that break us
    Apart from our powerful lust.

    Now this is the time and day
    That we all must trust
    And ought not break our
    Bond of trust

    Curiosity killed the cat
    Satisfaction brought it back
    Now I must come back to the

    Lack of slack that
    Hacked my back too crack
    When I stepped on a crack
    Which will extract the lack of slack

    Show me the magic Kurt Cobain
    So that I can feel your pain
    Standing in the rain
    Thus your pain my gain

    Thru cane too slain
    My great done jus
    Before the passing train

    Some ware down
    The lane you shall
    Endure my dreadful pain

    High atop a crumbling crane
    So come on Kurt Cobain
    Show me your pain .

    Submitted on 2009-10-09 22:20:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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