I’m going to be completely honest with you here.
I really disliked this….writing
It’s just so…crammed together, and it doesn’t make much sense. I mean sure you’re mad but that is no reason to be repetitive you said Rage quite often and there are other words for anger that would have allowed it to be more….interesting.
Must not engage my final
Stage of my rage all alone
On the frightful stage of my rage
The Titians rage must not engage
Rage, stage, rage, stage
See what I mean?
Now I’m not going to completely bash this piece the idea is fine just, describe your feelings a bit more and you’ll have yourself a much better piece.
Instead of saying “stage of my rage” twice you could re word it a bit.
My advice is to give this some serious editing.
Whenever I write, I tend to completely relax, clear my mind, and then the words just flow. Of course everyone has different methods but that’s just how I roll.
Well I have to say this poem has the potential to be a lot better, I like the idea and I can tell that the words are meant to be strong and filled with fury, the thing is this piece is a bit jumbled together. Perhaps if you spaced it out a bit more and elaborated a tad, about how the rage makes you feel. Also in this part…
Filled with rage I am trapped
In my own cage why must I
Land on the very last page
I get the impression here that you just wanted to rhyme words more than express rage, though of course that is just from my viewpoint.
If you stressed a bit more on why the rage makes you feel trapped I think this poem would be able to improve greatly.