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Sad and Blue


Author: Dawnyd
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Class/Type: Poetry /Lostfriend
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Tears for a love that is gone


Sad and Blue


Looking up into a gray sky

Can you see the tears I cry?

Sad and blue I cry for you

Sad and blue what can I do?

You can't come back ever again

I know my heart will never mend

I know my life must go on

I don't know how, now that your gone





Submitted on 2009-10-10 10:34:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is good Dawn! Love brings much joy into our lives, and unfortunately also many tears. But, the old standby saying is "better to have loved and lost, than never to have loved at all" (although it doesn't feel that way while mending a broken heart)!

You have a developing talent that is delightful!
| Posted on 2009-10-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  You should write for greeting cards
| Posted on 2009-10-10 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]


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