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    dots Submission Name: The collected stories of the minddots
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    Author: PrinceofDark
    ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 5/1/2
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 491
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 791



    Description:
       I find this piece to be more of a lesson than a poem, though judge it for yourself.


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    dotsThe collected stories of the minddots
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    Dreams, what are they exactly?
    A twistation of the mindís own imaginative path,
    A vision twirling out of control
    until it slams into a collapsing wall of disorganized thoughts.
    perhaps not for all but for me
    my dreams tell me stories.
    stories about myself that even I had no idea about.
    they talk about the good as well as the bad,
    not caring about hurting my feelings
    as if they have a mind of their own.
    but even still dreams can be goals
    set fourth so that individuals shallant fear the future
    but instead embrace it.
    all men who have achieved great things
    have been great dreamers.

    so never give up on your dreams

    even if they give up on you.





    Submitted on 2009-10-10 19:27:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this one, cause itís clearly worded and the writing doesnít stray too far off topic. Your point is clear, not to mention strong. Showing that even if itís you against the world, still never give up.


    Dreams, what are they exactly?
    A twistation of the mindís own imaginative path,
    A vision twirling out of control
    until it slams into a collapsing wall of disorganized thoughts.


    I think this had a really strong start, I love the descriptive wording involved in this, you can really feel the chaos. Like speaking of your mind as if it was another person type of deal, really creative!
    | Posted on 2009-10-11 00:00:00 | by Nm156 | [ Reply to This ]


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