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FEAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Author: stormkrow
ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51 /52 /39
Words: 108
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Writen by my nephew just like Rage, Life,and Escape


FEAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


FEAR

My heart is full of fear
I shed a tear on a broken mirror
All alone at the end of the pier
My remorse is so near that I cant
Find a cure

I feel the fear
It hurts to be here
I here the final jeer





Submitted on 2009-10-10 21:43:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice rhyming skills, it’s a little short but if that’s your thing then go with it. It’s pretty cool in my opinion, I really like poems that are based off of emotion, and always have :)

My heart is full of fear

I shed a tear on a broken mirror

My opinion is the opening was really strong then it kinda went blahhhh
still point being…I like it!
| Posted on 2009-10-10 00:00:00 | by DragonQueen | [ Reply to This ]


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