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    dots Submission Name: FEAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!dots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 542
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 343



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       Writen by my nephew just like Rage, Life,and Escape


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    dotsFEAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!dots
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    FEAR

    My heart is full of fear
    I shed a tear on a broken mirror
    All alone at the end of the pier
    My remorse is so near that I cant
    Find a cure

    I feel the fear
    It hurts to be here
    I here the final jeer





    Submitted on 2009-10-10 21:43:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice rhyming skills, itís a little short but if thatís your thing then go with it. Itís pretty cool in my opinion, I really like poems that are based off of emotion, and always have :)

    My heart is full of fear

    I shed a tear on a broken mirror

    My opinion is the opening was really strong then it kinda went blahhhh
    still point beingÖI like it!
    | Posted on 2009-10-10 00:00:00 | by DragonQueen | [ Reply to This ]


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