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    dots Submission Name: My Suicidedots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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       i guess you can say this is about being in a destructive relationship. one you know that you don't need but yet can't leave.


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    dotsMy Suicidedots
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    v1.
    baby, your lips are like cocaine
    just one kiss and i can't get enough
    i go insane, just craving for your touch
    the need to feel your skin against mine
    only grows stronger and i run right back to you
    when i can't resist any longer
    there's nothing i can say, no words to explain
    why i'm addicted to you when i know

    ch.
    your love is my suicide
    every time i'm with you
    a part of me dies
    i always seem to lose
    and it's always my heart
    with another bruise
    how much can i take
    till i can't take anymore
    where will you be
    when my heart hits the floor

    v2.
    i didn't know how strong it was
    i didn't know how sweet you could taste
    but now i know and i can't let go
    don't walk away, you're my only escape
    from this world i don't belong in, save me
    save me from this world full of pain
    you're my path of self destruction and i know
    that there's no way to save myself because

    ch.

    br.
    your lips, my cocaine
    you keep me from going insane
    i need you, i hate you
    i can't get enough of you
    i will take you till i can't take anymore
    till my heart hits the floor
    it's nother but another bruise
    what do i have left to lose when

    ch.

    co.
    your love is my suicide
    every time i'm with you
    a part of me dies

    05/09




    Submitted on 2009-10-11 04:04:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Awe thanks Sarah! I'm debating about posting some of the other lyrics I've written..as soon as I find where I've saved them haha. So when I do...hopefully you'll read them!!

    MISSED YA!!!
    -Kriss

    p.s., I definately am going to start putting my lyrics to music. I'm getting back into singing and my friends' going to teach me how to play guitar so soon I'll start doing that. You'll def. be one of the first to hear them!
    | Posted on 2009-11-11 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This brings back memories. As always Great write Kriss. Your lyrics always paint such a good emotional picture and these do just that. This is a great piece and I cant wait to see more from you, now that you're back lol. Great piece, keep writing.

    Sarah

    P.S. You so need to put ur lyrics to music, I'm dying to hear some of your songs.
    | Posted on 2009-11-02 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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