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    dots Submission Name: Our Truthdots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 695
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 369



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    dotsOur Truthdots
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    We dance and spin
    Weaving a fabric of lust.
    Irredescent light shining from the moon
    As a token of our trust.
    Fading from light to night
    Our love combusts.
    Kind enough
    To keep us apart.
    All in one
    We share a heart.
    And forever hold
    A sign of youth.
    Even deeper yet
    Is our truth.




    Submitted on 2009-10-11 22:20:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that is truly amazing!! I LOVE IT!!
    | Posted on 2009-10-13 00:00:00 | by gothgirl101 | [ Reply to This ]


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