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    dots Submission Name: Missingdots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 575
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 741



    Description:
       Not actually a poem. A momentary burst of emotional reaction to and event set off by the stupidest things. Sadface.


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    dotsMissingdots
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    I could love you forever
    you are so deep inside of me
    but our futures are calling
    and we are not allowed to be

    I don't ever want to miss you
    you won't hurt my heart
    a perfect part will be removed
    leaving a hole I'll never find

    I have to let you go
    because this place is a prison
    where we whither in indecision
    waiting for the fire

    but don't expect a shove
    when it's time to step away
    I may say run
    but my eyes beg stay

    so go away and live your life
    by god, do what you must
    I'll stay here and do the same
    forgetting what I've lost...




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