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    dots Submission Name: Tears of a church going lesbiandots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Those damn nice christian teenagers with all the holy convictions and shit are after me again. Damn! but shes nice, i'll give her that much. i dont know, should i give her a chance to fix me?


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    dotsTears of a church going lesbiandots
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    Your eyes held mine
    Sorry, questioning concerned
    It was good to feel you care
    As tears poured from my insides, and fell past the floor of the church
    And you prayed over my situation
    Honestly, non-judging, like youd known me forever
    Only wed just met
    I let you, I let you pray
    To a god who, im not sure I believe in
    And I prayed too
    For the first time in a long time
    That I would let you help me
    I envied you for your beliefs
    You took this all so easily, so seriously
    The way I used to, before I ended up in hell
    You put your faith in this so earnestly
    Enough to come up to me
    Rub your hand across the small of my back
    Did you know how much I needed that?
    Look at me, one more time
    Hold your honest eyes to mine
    Make me understand myself
    Because for once, Im willing
    To accept your help




    Submitted on 2009-10-12 07:27:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is very touching. the surrender of it, and trusting, and caution and doubtfulness too, its got so much emotion to it, and honest. just well done. have courage. with love. kt
    | Posted on 2009-10-12 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]


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