Lover Moon pt 2

Author: silentpoison ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204 /259 /118 Words: 84

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Lover Moon pt 2

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Dear lover moon i lay under you and your blanket of night count the stars like fireflies and for you my heart is light your cricket sound does sernade a maiden's head doth swoon to feel your lips does reminisce sweetness never known bath me with your glow dear sir fill me with your heat for in my dreams we shall meet and in the thickets we shall feel like lovers do

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Throughout the history of mankind, the Moon has inspired romantic thoughts! This reads like a winsome song, courting the Man In The Moon; it's quite delightful actually! Nice work!

| Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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