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    dots Submission Name: Lover Moon pt 2dots
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    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsLover Moon pt 2dots
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    Dear lover moon
    i lay under you
    and your blanket of night
    count the stars like fireflies
    and for you my heart is light
    your cricket sound
    does sernade
    a maiden's head doth swoon
    to feel your lips
    does reminisce
    sweetness never known
    bath me with your glow dear sir
    fill me with your heat
    for in my dreams
    we shall meet
    and in the thickets
    we shall feel
    like lovers do




    Submitted on 2009-10-12 10:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Throughout the history of mankind, the Moon has inspired romantic thoughts!

    This reads like a winsome song, courting the Man In The Moon; it's quite delightful actually!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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