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Lover Moon pt 2

Author: silentpoison
ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
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Words: 84
Class/Type: Misc /Love
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Lover Moon pt 2

Dear lover moon
i lay under you
and your blanket of night
count the stars like fireflies
and for you my heart is light
your cricket sound
does sernade
a maiden's head doth swoon
to feel your lips
does reminisce
sweetness never known
bath me with your glow dear sir
fill me with your heat
for in my dreams
we shall meet
and in the thickets
we shall feel
like lovers do

Submitted on 2009-10-12 10:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Throughout the history of mankind, the Moon has inspired romantic thoughts!

This reads like a winsome song, courting the Man In The Moon; it's quite delightful actually!

Nice work!
| Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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