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    dots Submission Name: The Firstdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       Outside the downtown Pville apartment the rain comes for a visit with a smile to share ;-)


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    dotsThe Firstdots
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    Welcome first rain of Autumn
    Cleansing the parched landscape
    Summer
    Changing colors
    Vibrant Hues
    Materialize
    Expressing Muse

    Cool Air
    Water
    Life
    Anew

    Thank you first rain of Autumn
    Nurturing the land for hibernation
    F
    A
    L
    L

    Snow capped peaks
    Nature seeks
    Solace




    Submitted on 2009-10-12 22:11:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fantastic imagery and great structure both lend to be a great support to the whole piece, the abstract appearance personifies each new fall as it is an abstract experience each time, never can we expect exactly how our lives might twist into perfection or reach into shambles.. Thoroughly enjoyed. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2011-06-18 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely Beautiful (with capitals;)

    seriously one of the best reads i've read in a very long time...simply splendid...truly perfect
    there for i have no critique for you just the way i felt it and how i'll savor it.

    i've never been the biggest fan of the Fall but i have always Loved the colours<-(i'm Canadian:) this poem gave me a bit of warmth toward the wet part of this season...peeling back the layers of change and looking at them for what they are...a true necessity of nature.

    you have perfect meter and the use of slight rhyme combined with your phrasing...i'm speechless and this is starting to become nothing but buttkissing praise so i'm just going to Thank You and leave now

    Thank You...i'm keeping this one close
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I grew up on the High Plains, where the farmers and ranchers were usually praying for rain! I know the feeling of dreading the drouth, and the absolute insane joy of having rain fall after a dry period!

    This poem reminded me of my youth! Nice write Tif!
    | Posted on 2009-10-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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