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    dots Submission Name: When First You Held Medots
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    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWhen First You Held Medots
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    When first you held me
    All was clear.
    The air was still
    And hope was near.

    Though my eyes
    Were dry throughout,
    My stuttering heart
    Was not without -

    A boost of some
    Chemical strange
    Some kind of comfort
    That you gave.

    The world was gone.
    Scars disappeared,
    And all there was
    Was lying here.




    Submitted on 2009-10-12 23:52:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Simple and beautiful, it couldn't be more perfect.
    | Posted on 2009-10-13 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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