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Author:	doppelganger
ASL Info:	26/f/your brain
Elite Ratio:	1.98 - 34/223/160
Words:	58

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	608
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	419

Description:
Blah, I'm just writing this writers block out.

When First You Held Me dots

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When first you held me
All was clear.
The air was still
And hope was near.

Though my eyes
Were dry throughout,
My stuttering heart
Was not without -

A boost of some
Chemical strange
Some kind of comfort
That you gave.

The world was gone.
Scars disappeared,
And all there was
Was lying here.

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Simple and beautiful, it couldn't be more perfect.
| Posted on 2009-10-13 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]

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