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    dots Submission Name: To my Beloveddots

    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       blahhhhhhhh. epic fail.
    again, just trying to write out this block. >.<

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsTo my Beloveddots

    You are the book:
    I've tried so hard to open,
    though my fingers kept slipping
    on your beautiful cover.

    You are the poem:
    I've tried so hard to write,
    though every time I got too close
    I gave up on imperfections.

    You are the song:
    That's played along in silence
    through every phase of my life,
    I heard it loud and clear.

    You are the book, the poem, the song,
    The one purpose for my chest
    to rise and fall.

    You are the book:
    I turned pages in earnest,
    A desire to read, to know,
    To love every word.

    You are the poem:
    I found written in the snow,
    Foreign to pen for its honesty,
    And endearing in mistakes.

    You are the song:
    I heard my heart humming,
    The first night I surrendered
    My outcome to the fates...

    To you-

    Submitted on 2009-10-12 23:54:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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