This is a well-done piece with crisp images and real emotion. The only criticism I can think of is that images like "was a scatter-blast, jackhammering
my inner workings to wet gunpowder" are quite/ possibly too abstract, but that is also a great part of the piece's charm, so perhaps that's an example of breaking the rules and it working well.
I have to agree with Scared and Theo on this one. It's a beautiful piece, very emotional and heartfelt. No time for regrets at this point, we do what we have to and keep moving forward. As Sen. Grayson would say, we're rolling, if you're not on board, just stfu and get out of the way, and stop f-ing up the ones who are! (Well, minus the f's...)
Really well-written. Triumph with a twist of remorse... it makes it a bitter swallow.
So much pain, in such few words to me. What you feel in words here can be put in the picture of a divorce battle of custody from a child's view. Of a office on foreign soil watching a bullet come at him. Of a mother waning to feel her little one's touch, of a father dying to see his child smile again and see the light of day. Such pain's I Understand but do not know as well as you do from your words. I can not say I love this, because I hate that you can experience such pain in your life. I, at the same time, do admire the emotion put in this with such diginty and grace.